e a m harris

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A new haiku challenge – ‘The rays of the setting sun’.

Once again the Carpe Diem site has come up with an interesting prompt. Its inspiration is a classic haiku by Kikaku, a contemporary of Basho.

This is a translation of the poem:

in the rays of the setting sun
there flutters along the city street
a butterfly

I think it is a lovely image. Mine however leaves the butterflies and concentrates on the sky:

Red-rimmed clouds gather
in the west. Behind them,
today’s sun sets.

As I roamed around the house and garden mulling the haiku and trying different versions in my head, I felt it should be expanded into a tanka.

Red-rimmed clouds gather
in the west. Behind, today’s
sun sets. My neighbour
passes me in the street.
‘Nice day tomorrow,’ he says.

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8 thoughts on “A new haiku challenge – ‘The rays of the setting sun’.

  1. Happy to be back and admire your haiku!

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  2. Haiku always leaves you hungry for more. Both are fabulous the Haiku and the Tanka. I simply love good haiku poems- the picture they create in mind keep lingering like fragrance.

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  3. Long time no see … good to read a new haiku and a nice tanka written/composed by you …

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  4. Both your haiku and tanka are beautiful. Both are visual words.

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